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Andrea and I spend a lot of time helping students find rich details to add to their writing. Over and over we emphasize how the five sense can be used to draw the reader or listener into the world and experience of the writer or storyteller. Rarely does it happen that a young elementary student has too much detail. But it does occur in upper grades and in the story world too. In these cases an exercise that sought to encourage richness is embarrassed by gluttony. The "riches" of an overly detailed sensory experience can crush a plot and settings or characters too larded over in detail can cause the story to be lost.

When this happens I realize I need to mention that brainstorming and free writing in our journals are like shopping is to cooking. Not everything we bring home from the market or in from the garden will go into a meal. While the poisonous green leaves of a tomato are necessary to create a red luscious fruit, we will not add in any of the green plant of the tomato to our finished dish.

So it is with stories. There are many supporting details that connect and are essential to the best details for your story. As essential as these supporting details are, they must be left out for the story to be edible or listenable.

Somedays I fervently wish fellow storytellers would pay attention to this. Brevity is the soul of wit. And it takes time and attention. Or, as Blaise Pascal once said, "I have made this [letter] longer, because I have not had the time to make it shorter." - French mathematician, Blaise Pascal, "Lettres provinciales", letter 16, 1657

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BMO 2013 Winners

Scott Schultz, 1st prize, Katie Liesener, 2nd and Rob Goldman, 3rd Prize

StoriesLive® Winners - 2012

StoriesLive® 2013:

Sophomores:

Annemarie DeMarco-Alfama - 1st place

Kenny Le & Moises Caraballo - Runner-ups

Juniors:

Latisha Joujute - 1st place

Stephen Carlin & Henry Chavez - Runner-Ups

Kristen Ruffin - Audience Choice

Seniors:

Nico Luisi - 1st Place

Moises Ramirez & Vance Crayton - Runner-ups

Theodore Biv - Audience Choice

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StoriesLive® 2012:

First place, and $1,000  prize

Junior Fernando Ortiz from Revere High School 

Senior Amario Malcolm from Boston Latin Academy

Runners-up ($500 each)11th

Alan Estes from Newburyport, 

AngelinaFerullo from Everett and 

Runners-up ($500 each)12th Caylen Bryant (Andover) 

Shavar Lazarus (Boston Latin Academy).

Audience Choice awards:

11th Justin Alexander 

(South Community High) 

12th Varvarra Valentin

(Lynn Classical High School)

massmouth choice awards:

Juniors 

Jennifer MonJoie(Revere) 

Bahiya Nasuuna (Chelsea) 

Karen Hua (Andover) 

Senior 

Jason Hittinger (Revere)

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Last Year 2011: StoriesLive® first ever high school story slam. 1st place awarded a $2,000 scholarship Brianda Agramonte, Lynn Classical High School, senior

2 runners up received $1,000 scholarship each: junior Conor Miller Newburyport High School and Mathews DeSouza, Everett High School,  Our "massmouth choice" was Sandy Fonseca, Boston Latin Academy, senior [below] She was awarded $500

Lexi Hernando Lynn Classical High School, senior was chosen by the attendees and awarded the Audience Choice prize of $500.

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